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Jazmine Cecilia, She's the Eevee-Loving Girl!
Shauntal
post Aug 15 2012, 09:55 PM
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Name: Jazmine Cecilia
Age: 18
Hometown: Johto

Appearance: Jazmine is an average-sized girl, about 5'3" feet tall. She has dark brown hair and brown eyes. Her hair goes down to the middle of her back, and it is wavy all the way down. She has a light scar on the side of her next from when she cut it when she was little, her pale skin mostly hiding it. Her skin, as I said, is pale, but not too pale to make her look like a ghost.
Jazmine usually wears black, frilly, tight-fitting mini-dresses, including white lacing on the bottom of the dress. It has frills from the waist down, and she wears a black mini-jacket with pink trimming. Her boots are also black with a pink trimming. At the top of them, the leather folds out to look like a witch's boots. She also wears a necklace with a gold crescent moon, a present from her best friend before she left to start her journey.

Personality: Jazmineis a calm-tempered, strategic girl. She loves to fight other trainers, and show off her skills in strategic thinking. She most likes to be alone with her Pokémon, but doesn't mind others around. Crystal is a nice girl, and would help a sick Pokémon if she found one. She is most interested in learning all she can about Pokémon, but doesn't want to be a Professor in any way. When she's in a situation that's disastrous, she will not hesitate to think up a plan to save any of the Pokémon involved, even if that means she cannot help herself. She acts this way because of a time she saw a trainer treating their Pokémon poorly, and strives not to be like that trainer.

Biography: Jazmine was raised by her older sister, Crystal, who had finished her Pokémon training long before. Her life was almost as normal as any other child, but she was raised with pokémon all around her, particularly Eevee. Her sister had tried to create their own Eevee farm, which proved to be successful.
When she was only 9, a year before she started her adventure, she had rescued a young Eevee, who lived in the wild, from a gang of Haunters. She had fended them off with Crystal's own Flareon, whom was always with her when she went out into the forest, to protect her from dangerous Pokémon, as Crystal had said to her. After rescuing the Eevee, she brought it home, and took care of it until it was fully healed. She knew Eevee were hard to come by in the wild, but she figured it was just a trainer's Eevee that they had released. Afterwards, the Eevee became her best friend, and as a result it took her offer with a water stone that would make him evolve into a Vaporeon. She called the Vaporeon Leaf, after her sister's beloved Venusaur was stolen one night, after Crystal's last battle with him. They believe that the theif was the Pokémon Trainer who was obviously jealous of Crystal's powerful pokémon, and then stole it while they were asleep, but they aren't that sure.
During her adventure through Johto, she learned of a different kind of Pokémon who only thrived at night; Ghost types. She became obsessed with them, and wanted everything to do with them. She researched every Ghost pokemon that was available in her region, and eventually caught her own, a Ghastly she named Ghost. Ghost was sent to her sister back in New Bark Town, and is still living there.
To this day, her Vaporeon Leaf resides with her sister back at home. She doesn't use him anymore as a battle partner, but still loves him as though she'd just became his friend. Her current Pokémon were all caught not by battling, but by winning over their affection.

Jazmine decided to travel to Furoh after she got bored of wandering the same pathways and hidden trails of Johto. She hopes to accomplish her dream goal of documenting every Ghost-Type Pokémon, which she believes that there will be kinds of ghosts she didn't even know existed. She had waited for 8 years before she decided because at first, she wasn't sure if she was ready to leave behind her homeland. She has finally decided that it is time to see the world, and is ready to explore the farthest reaches of Furoh.

Class: More or less, other.

Starting Pokemon: Female Cyndaquil lv. 9, Male Riolu lv. 8, Male Eevee lv. 3

Cyndaquil: Jazmine got her Cyndaquil from Professor Elm. She recieved Quill when she started her journey at 12. She had wanted to get to know more types of Pokémon other than Ghost Types and her Vaporeon, so she left Leaf at home and went to obtain her starting Pokémon. He wanted Crystal to take good care of the Cyndaquil, and to teach it to behave better. She realized that he had given her a Female Cyndaquil, which was quite rare to come across. She named her new Cyndaquil Quill, and Quill has been with her since then. Her and Quill are best friends, and they train together, hoping one day Quill will become a Typholson.

Riolu: While Jazmine and Quill were wandering in the Ilex Forest, she met a small Riolu who was badly injured. He had fallen out of a tree while trying to get some berries, and apparently had very bad balance. After nursing him to full health, Jazmine tried to introduce him back to the wild, only to realize he wanted to join her team. She named the little Riolu Jagd Wolf. They have been together since then.

Male Eevee: Her Eevee was a gift from her sister after she obtained Jagd Wolf, her Riolu. She named her Eevee Jolt, and plans to evolve it with a Thunderstone. Her and Jolt aren't the best of friends, but they trust each other and are willing to help one-another if they're in trouble. Jolt has trouble trusting Jagd Wolf and Quill, so they don't get along well.

Items: Jazmine owns only 2 pokéballs. She also carries plenty of super repels (around 50), around 20 super potions, and a few evolution stones (leaf, sun, and dawn). She doesn't usually catch Pokémon so she normally carries around very few Pokéballs.

What is the biscuit's name? The answer is Scheherazade.
Other Notes: Um... if you want to know any more about her, just post, I guess? Not sure what else to put here.

This post has been edited by Jazmine Lucario Trainer: Sep 7 2012, 06:43 PM


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post Aug 17 2012, 01:48 AM
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Okay, we've got a good start to the profile, but I can't approve it just yet. Let's make a few tweaks:

First: Watch spelling! "Averag-sized" and "Sheloves" are mistakes, if seen constantly, will cause you to lose points in rp grading.

Appearance: 5-6 feet tall? You're allowed to be more specific. There's a great difference in height between 5 feet tall and six feet tall. Conveniently, average height for an 18 year old white female is 5'5" (I didn't know this offhand, I used the internet. grin.gif )



Excellent description on her attire.

Bio: It's a good start. Let's get a few more specifics in here. You have some nice ideas, but let's tidy them up a bit.

"The Eevee became her best friend, and as a result, it took her offer..."

What offer is this? There's nothing mentioned beforehand.

Where would she find an Eevee in the wild? Eevee is a rather rare pokemon. How did Crystal, a 9 year old child, stave off a group of Haunters? That seems like a pretty incredible feat, and would like to know more.

You mention that Crystal's Venusaur was stolen...is there a reason? Jazmine and Crystal do not need to know, but you, the player, should. I would like to see a bit more specificity in the story.

Jazmine was born in Johto (New Bark Town, I'm assuming), but journeyed through Kanto. Did she journey through Johto first? How much older is Crystal than Jazmine? Why was she interested in ghost pokemon (yet lacking any in her current line up?)

When did Jazmine receive Cyndaquil? Was this when she turned 10 and was eligible to be a trainer, or did she get Quill later, after journeying with Leaf the Vaporeon.

Riolu: How was Riolu badly injured? Jazmine does not need to know, but I think you, her player, should. Also, Shiny Pokemon are not easy to come by in PANE. In order to receive one, you need to place First, Second or Third in a Fanfiction Contest. Otherwise, Shiny Pokemon are denied.

Why did Jazmine decide to travel to Furoh? What does she hope to accomplish there? Why did she wait until she was 18, 8 years after beginning her first journey?

The Master Ball is absolutely not allowed. I see you have a plan for it, but it's still denied. No one in PANE, to date, has been allowed to receive one, let alone start with one.

Anyway, some nice ideas in there. I would attempt a re-write, in order to organize and flesh out these storylines in Jazmine's history. Hopefully my questions serve as a good guideline for you in fully forming Jazmine and smoothing it out into one solid story, rather than a series of seemingly haphazard events.


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post Aug 18 2012, 01:36 AM
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First of all, sorry about the spelling mistakes! I tend to type really fast, and I don't normally go over my mistakes, but the computer that I was using when writing out my profile can't handle how fast I type. XD And that same computer doesn't have spell-check, so I really didn't pay attention to if I made any mistakes, let alone it was 10 PM and I was extremely tired, ha ha.

I tried to fix it as much as possible, I hope it's much better now! I don't mind the criticize, it helps me develop my profile-writing skills.


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post Aug 19 2012, 12:32 PM
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Approved.

Post in the current levels thread and have fun!


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