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[robwar389]

Name: English style: Blaine Ryukiba. (Ryukiba means “dragon fang” when translated from Japanese, and it’s pronounced ree-you-kee-ba.) Japanese style: Ryukiba Blaine.
Age: 15
Hometown: Unknown. He was raised away from most people.

Appearance: Classic combination of blonde hair, blue eyes, and a light skin tone. He’s right around 6’ tall. He’s also fairly lean. He keeps his semi-curly hair fairly short, no longer than it is when it touches his ears.
Wears black tights, black boots that go up to his calf, black socks, black long-sleeve muscle shirt, etc. Also wears a black cloak with a hood. His cloak has pockets. Sometimes has his hood up, and when he does, he’ll often have a mask on as well. The only thing he wears that isn’t black is a bright red scarf. He has several copies of his preferred outfit, each one exactly the same as the next.
When you try to imagine him, think ninja.

Personality: Slightly insane, short tempered, and can be very annoying. On the other hand, he’s incredibly smart, and has a liking for helping out. He really loves Pokemon. In fact, he prefers Pokemon over humans. Somehow able to understand Pokemon and translate, word for word.

Biography: Was raised alongside a group of oddly ninja-like Pokemon, but didn't see many other humans besides his parents. Was trained in some unusual skills, such as stealth. He got his Froakie as a gift from his parents. Soon afterward it was found that he could speak the language of Pokemon, and was therefore asked rather often to act as a translater. He captured the Nincada when he was 12. He raised his Pokemon carefully, giving them what they needed. They have become his closest friends.

Class: Trainer

Starting Pokemon:
Sneak, male Froakie, level 10
Nin, male Nincada, Level 10

Items: Map, 10 Potions, 5 Super Potions, 10 Poke Balls, 2 Revives

What is the biscuit's name? The answer is... Scheherazade
Other Notes: Very skillful at stealth, and can even seem to disappear. Usually lets Sneak stay out in the open.

[Toogee]

OK, so you added some stuff. However, it really feels like a bunch of notes jotted down. I'll have specific suggestions, but I really want you to rewrite the whole thing with complete sentences and reread to see if it makes sense and sounds good. Here's some specifics:

I was only entertaining the idea of Blaine understanding pokemon based on your writing ability. Yes, you gave a reason, but your reason needs reasons. All I have is that there's a medallion involved and it is odd. I really don't want to approve the ability at all, mostly because it just feels tacked onto your profile to make Blaine unique. You're going to have to work a bit harder to convince me otherwise.

In the bio, again, it feels like you wrote down notes. "He was born to a family of spies/teachers/martial artists/you name it." Elaborate. It seems you're really trying to create Furoh's first ninja clan. You can't put that in one sentence. This seems to be a major part of Blaine's history. This could also help explain why Blaine was kept away from society. Don't you want to say more? There's no story behind them?

Most of the major events of his life are relegated to a single sentence. He received Froakie as a gift. A gift for what? This is a major point in his life: he gained his first pokemon, his partner for the rest of his life. He learned his primary skill of stealth, but we're not given any details as to who taught him or why or how. Is there nothing else you want to add? Each sentence in your bio could easily be a paragraph if you wanted them to. There's no word limit here at PANE. Let loose.

Finally, his missing parents seem to be an afterthought. The last three sentences read like this:

"I'm going to find all the legendaries! And maybe after a couple, I might find out what happened to my parents who disappeared mysteriously. Not really sure. We'll see after I find Lugia or something."

If that is what you intended, by all means, run with it. Something tells me it wasn't. To get the most out of PANE, you really have to enjoy writing. Don't limit yourself with single sentence descriptors.