Kae Lynch, My character |
Jan 23 2010, 07:42 AM
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Pokémon Trainer Group: Newbies Posts: 5 Joined: 21-December 09 From: France Member No.: 77 146 Active Squad |
Name: Kae Michelle Lynch
Age: 16 Hometown: Fidona Appearance: Kae has shoulder-length strawberry blonde hair, and her cold electric/ice blue eyes give her a chilling profile. She has porcelain-pale skin, and stands around 5'6, her weight being 38 KG. She often wears a dark purple sweatshirt, slightly unzipped, revealing a white and light green T-Shirt with a Kirlia print on it. Her jeans are black, and she wears white trainers. Kae also carries a shoulder bag around her shoulders, in which she carries her pokeballs, notebook, spare clothes, potions, etc. Personality: Kae is a cold and chilling girl, a don't-give-a-hoot-about-anything type. She is not an optimist, and is rarely hopeful. She is a warm-hearted girl when you get her to open up. Mostly Kae has a quick mind, is sarcastic, and will pass a snarky comment when she's annoyed. But she's extremely loyal to her Pokemon and they are to her in turn. If Kae is provoked, she will fight nonetheless. Biography: Kae was born on a cold but sunny morning on April 4th, in the town of Fidona. She was very noisy and was crying a lot at first but eventually she quieted down. Ever since then she displayed a great sense of intellectuality, being able to walk when she was 7 months old. She showed quite an ability as she was able to solve puzzles at the age of 3, and jumped off high surfaces (such as a swing, a tree etc.) when she was 6. When Kae was 7, she wandered out to the backyard and prowled under a hedge. There she found two eggs, one a dull blue with a yellow cross, and another a white egg with two yellow spots and a blue base. She took the dull blue one and showed it to her mother. Her mother touched the egg to examine it, and it zapped her. She fell, and her heartbeat stopped. Kae's father took her to a nearby hospital, but they could do nothing for her. Kae, half-orphaned, shut herself off from anyone except her father. About the egg, Kae took care of it, even though it killed her mother. Soon it was covered in cracks, so Kae and her father went to a Pokemon center, and there it hatched. Kae was really happy, and took care of the Shinx tirelessly. When she was 11, Kae asked her father if she could become a Pokemon trainer. He agreed, on one condition. That condition was that she would go when she was 13. Kae agreed, and led a normal like (except for the Shinx) till then. When she was 13, Kae smashed her piggy bank and gave the money to her father, and he exchanged it for 10,000 Pokedollars. Kae set off on her own, from Fidona to Port Barely on her bike. There, she started her journey, and one night, she managed to catch a Pichu. She was really happy, and every since then, Pichu traveled on her shoulder and Shinx by her side. She hated putting them into the Pokeballs, it made her feel she was locking them up. After some time, like 2 months, she reached the mid-point between Port Barely and Petropolis. There she changed route. Her main goals had been finding and collecting battle Pokemons, and fighting Pokemon battles. But she didn't find any she liked at all. She continued on her way, search for Pokemon. She nearly caught herself a Pachirisu, but it got away in the last moment. When she was 15, she was wandering through a forest, half-playing with her Shinx. There, she tripped and fell, scraping her palms, elbows and knees. As she was getting up, she spotted a slightly hatched Riolu egg. Kae had read books about Pokemon, and she knew what that egg was. She liked the egg so much, she took it with her, holding it most of the time. After 2-3 weeks, it hatched, and a baby Riolu came out. Kae took really good care of it, and loved it as much as she loved her other Pokemon. Like her other Pokemon, Kae hated putting Riolu in a Pokeball, so she kept him outside with her, only putting him back in her Pokeball when needed. Starter Pokemon: Pichu Level: 5 Ability: Static Gender: Female Nature: Naughty Moves: Thundershock, Charm, Tailwhip Shinx Level: 8 Ability: Rivalry Gender: Male Nature: Calm Moves: Tackle, Leer, Charge Riolu Level: 7 Ability: Inner Focus Gender: Female Nature: Hasty Moves: Quick attack, foresight, endure, counter Items: Pokégear Pokétch Waterproof backpack Pokeballs x1 Great Ball x3 Potions x12 Purple PokeDex x1 Poke Chow x2 Spare Clothes First Aid Kit Ice Heal x4 Burn Heal x4 Antidote x5 Paralyze Heal x4 What is the biscuit's name? Waldorf! I mean.. "The Biscuit's name is Waldorf." Other notes: Thank you for being so patient. This post has been edited by Eternal Chaos: Jan 25 2010, 02:17 PM
Reason for edit: Separated Bio into paragraphs for easier reading.
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Jan 24 2010, 05:00 AM
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Team Rogue: Houndoom Group: Members Posts: 2 186 Joined: 8-January 08 From: Austin, Texas Member No.: 804 Uprising Mod |
This seems unfinished. You have not explained where the riolu had come from, and I'd like to know a bit more about the starly.
Also, at this point, the pokemon levels, taken together, must be less than or equal to 20. Your current levels taken together are 48. You need to drastically reduce those levels. You only need to put one hometown (from the bio, that's Fidona). The rest of her travels can be shown in the bio, but the hometown field is strictly for where she considers her hometown. At this point, super potions are a bit powerful for her pokemon. Everything else looks excellent, so fix these minor things and we can accept the profile. -------------------- |
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Jan 24 2010, 05:49 AM
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Pokémon Trainer Group: Newbies Posts: 5 Joined: 21-December 09 From: France Member No.: 77 146 Active Squad |
Thanks for telling me. :]
I'll fix it right now. -------------------- Blue lips, Blue veins. Blue, the color of our planet from far away. |
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Jan 24 2010, 06:05 AM
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Team Rogue: Pidgeotto Group: RP Moderators Posts: 1 543 Joined: 9-January 08 From: Amazingstoke, UK Member No.: 814 PANE: Darryn Kellor |
Another thing to check out - your Pokemon's attacks. Please keep them true to the games and "poer level" of your Pokemon.
For example. Your Shinx will not be a high enough level to know Spark. Also, Shinx's egg moves are considered too powerful for it to use them from the beginning of the RP (with the exceptions of Quick Attack and Howl). If you are unsure, please pm a mod with a request for a Pokemon to know a certain move. -------------------- Darryn Kellor ~ ~ PANE Moderator ~ ~ Lori Pardare PANE Characters (click to show ) LA's Plays (click to show ) Unovalocke (click to show ) |
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Jan 24 2010, 06:11 AM
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Pokémon Trainer Group: Newbies Posts: 5 Joined: 21-December 09 From: France Member No.: 77 146 Active Squad |
I looked up the moves from pokemon.marriland.com
But the levels were higher that times. Sorry. I'll change it right now (again). -------------------- Blue lips, Blue veins. Blue, the color of our planet from far away. |
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Jan 24 2010, 09:56 AM
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Weak Livered Milk Drinker Group: RP Moderators Posts: 3 412 Joined: 19-August 07 From: Sitting in an English garden, waiting for the sun Member No.: 208 And a Golurk |
Approved. Go post in the Current Levels thread. Have fun!
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