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Second Characters Application, Want one?
Toogee
post May 1 2011, 09:46 AM
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Sorry, but you will likely need to rewrite both entries. Alex's entry is a simple synopsis of events. It tells me nothing about who he is and his personality. The same goes for Zach. You tell us about cutting down trees, a jittery teacher, and a bunch of scared students. THere's barely anything on Zach. As far as I can tell, he's Alex with some sort of mental illness and/or asthma.

Spend some time figuring out how these two are different (character-wise). Then compose a scenario that will emphasize these differences. Try to put them both in the same scenario (both are waking up, both are starting their journey for the first time, etc). That should help show how the two are different. wink.gif


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post May 26 2011, 10:42 PM
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Kamaitachi
post May 26 2011, 10:59 PM
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J'approve! Post a profile in the thread for approval round 2!


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post Jun 28 2011, 12:09 PM
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post Jun 28 2011, 01:38 PM
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Approved. Post your profile for step 2!


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post Jun 28 2011, 04:45 PM
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post Jun 30 2011, 12:00 AM
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Dragonwish,

You don't really show us any palpable difference in personalities. What you've done is basically given a list of tasks that Elizabeth and Hailey would do if they found themselves alone on a beach. There is some minor, inferred personality difference in say, their attire and the means in which they acquired them, but other than that, the two are not that different.

I'll give you one chance to re-write these, with these adjustments in mind. Try to show us some thought processes, or even different reactions to similar conditions.


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post Jun 30 2011, 12:43 PM
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post Jun 30 2011, 03:48 PM
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Approved. Post a character profile in the profiles for second round verification!


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post Jul 10 2011, 02:28 PM
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I rewrote them, since I don't think the situation showed their major differences very well. Enjoy!


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post Jul 10 2011, 05:29 PM
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Approved. Post the profile.


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post Jul 25 2011, 03:45 PM
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post Jul 25 2011, 08:32 PM
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Accepted. Post the new profile in the profile thread for step two!

Also, mind you, be careful of changing pronouns when dealing with pokemon. For Kyla, you switched between the female "she" and the neutral "it". I have this problem too, or else I wouldn't have noticed.


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post Sep 5 2011, 04:55 PM
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Finally got around to do this, even though it's probably gonna get rejected. :P Worth a shot.

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post Sep 5 2011, 05:18 PM
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I'm just the slightest bit iffy on this. The situations are...similar. They're both, as you say, recovering from an accident. On the one hand, those accidents are very different. Breaking one's arm is a bit more commonplace than being torn apart by a Drapion. However, I'll give you credit insofar as there is a bit of personality difference between the two. However, I've read enough of your stuff to know what Tyson is like as a character, and I can see that Royce Strife is different, even if you didn't do a stellar job here of proving it.

This is a very shaky approval, but approval all the same.

Go ahead and post your character profile for the second round of approval.


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post Dec 20 2011, 03:40 PM
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This is being edited. Will make a new post when I'm finished.

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post Dec 20 2011, 08:11 PM
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The first thing you must do is complete and have graded at least two (2) RPs in which you've received a 10/15 grading or higher


When I said you could use that RP for this application, I meant once it's been graded. Since it hasn't even been submitted for grading, it's not technically done.

(Since Amissa has apparently taken an extended absence without telling any of the other RP members, I would allow anyone in that storyline to submit the RP.)


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post Jan 10 2012, 07:23 AM
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The Fabulously Finicky Forests of the Fortunate Families of Fidona: 14/15
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post Jan 10 2012, 09:55 PM
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As a vegetarian for the past 8 years, I'd say that tofu is delicious.

Tangent aside, you're approved!


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