A Tale in Which People Meet and Things Happen. Also Pokemon are There, Arden, Julie, and Cesc |
Nov 1 2014, 08:18 AM
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Guess who's back? Group: Members Posts: 1 665 Joined: 24-July 12 From: Vlaanderen Member No.: 168 546 Jill Cortoma |
Sorry that everything's taking so long, I'll make sure to post something by tonight!
-------------------- My body... is made out of swords. Iron is my blood and glass is my heart. I have overcome countless battlefields undefeated. Not once have I retreated, Nor once have I been understood. Always alone.... On the hill of swords... intoxicated by victory... Thus, this life has no meaning... This body...surely was... Made out of blades. PANE (click to show ) Uprising (click to show ) |
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Nov 27 2014, 03:54 PM
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Pokémon Trainer Group: Members Posts: 23 Joined: 12-January 14 Member No.: 213 595 SNAKE SQUAD |
In my efforts to keep track of all the bees (so many bees), I noticed a slight communication problem. Kind of to be expected with so many of the same kind of pokemon running around. Some of the details of who is attacking who got a little muddled.
QUOTE The now-unpinned beedrill, while not possessing a particularly expressive visage, seemed even more vengeful as it beat its wings to become airborne once more. But the beedrill's movements communicated another feeling as well - pain. It was clearly injured from both the fight with Cesc's monferno and the sudden 'dramatic entrance' of the blonde girl. Its flight, which was previously quick and lethal, had now become wobbly and lopsided. Acting on impulse, Julie fiercely commanded Princess to tackle it. QUOTE Behind him, he heard Bardolph's cry of triumph. Turning back around to hear the full effect of his new combo, Cesc watched as the Beedrill that Jill had unceremoniously plowed into hit the ground with a dull thud. In an effort to fix this continuity error, I have a proposed retcon solution which I shall demonstrate using this BEE DIAGRAM: BEE DIAGRAM (click to show ) Basically I'll just go back and change Princess's target to one of the 'secondary bees' that Julie lured in. To summarize relevant plot points (since it's been a while):
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Nov 27 2014, 06:20 PM
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Guess who's back? Group: Members Posts: 1 665 Joined: 24-July 12 From: Vlaanderen Member No.: 168 546 Jill Cortoma |
Gotcha! Hehe, that unearthly awesome BEE-DIAGRAM though...
-------------------- My body... is made out of swords. Iron is my blood and glass is my heart. I have overcome countless battlefields undefeated. Not once have I retreated, Nor once have I been understood. Always alone.... On the hill of swords... intoxicated by victory... Thus, this life has no meaning... This body...surely was... Made out of blades. PANE (click to show ) Uprising (click to show ) |
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Dec 11 2014, 06:46 AM
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Guess who's back? Group: Members Posts: 1 665 Joined: 24-July 12 From: Vlaanderen Member No.: 168 546 Jill Cortoma |
I'll get my post done by tonight, because I currently don't know what I'm typing...
-------------------- My body... is made out of swords. Iron is my blood and glass is my heart. I have overcome countless battlefields undefeated. Not once have I retreated, Nor once have I been understood. Always alone.... On the hill of swords... intoxicated by victory... Thus, this life has no meaning... This body...surely was... Made out of blades. PANE (click to show ) Uprising (click to show ) |
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